Actually I think that's pretty good!
There's different kinds of joints obviously. The ones I would roll would usually look like that (kind of a zepplin shape).
I had a great friend who used to roll them and they'd look just like cigarettes. It was outstanding. Perfectly even, smooth burn. Packed tight and evenly. It was the best.
im gonna giv it a 5/7.
Crumbs around the roach make you look like a redneck, way too much paper at the end and the joint filling needs to be chopped kinda finer